Name/s sienna: Max & Sienna
Title: the skrem
Boom! Crash! It was a horrid, disgusting morning with thunder and lightning. Crash! Boom! I wake up startled by the lightning.“Aah!” I heard someone cry. Flash! Lightning smashed!!!! through the ceiling. “What’s happening?” I say scaredly. Pitter patter, pitter patter.””The thunderstorm” is calming down” I quietly say as I brush the bits of roof off me.I go to sleep dreaming of what to do in the morning.Cock-a-doodle-doo! “No way it’s more like this” Roar! “Huh?” I wake up realising that I am in dinosaur island.A dinosaur comes rushing at me…”Aah!”, it bites me. “it didn’t hurt. Wait a minute I pinch myself. “That didn’t hurt either”.I sit up seeing that everything was just a dream.
Happily I skip into the kitchen and see my mum making some breakfast for me. The End.
Hello Max I really like your writing I like how you have used some exclamation marks through your and some mysterious words.
ReplyDeleteHi Max my name is Ashtyn and I'm from Hay park school
ReplyDeleteI think you could delete the speech mark after the word 'thunderstorm'
From Ashtyn